So I originally had a thesis and premises, but Professor Silliman thinks I should take one of my premises and make it my thesis. My only problem with this is I don't know what to then make the premises.
My new thesis: People who go to college are generally more successful in their lives than those who do not attend college.
One of my premises could be that those who go to college make an average of 1 million dollars more in their lifetimes, but I am not sure what I should use for others. Any ideas for me?
I am no expert but it sounds good to me. Your thesis should be fine but someone might argue the use of the word generally. But everything is opinion, and the sentence says to me what your trying to get across. I wonder if you could use national studies to backup that premise. I know they have some legit studies that will prove that premise to be true.
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ReplyDeleteI like the thesis; it draws in the reader with an interesting topic. What were some of your other premises? I agree with Damon in being a little skeptical about the use of generally, it seems like it may detract from your statement a little. Also I'm not sure how true this statement is, but I read somewhere that the million dollar increase in wealth is before one factors in the amount of money the individual payed for college, and the actual difference in income is less significant. Its just a thought, but it may be worth looking into.
ReplyDeleteDamon, I appreciate your feedback. I do agree that the word generally could be changed. I also agree that almost everything is opinion anyways haha. There are studies that i could use to back this up and i think i will.
ReplyDeleteI didn't have any other premises. That is why i need to meet with professor Silliman and that is also why i posted it. I have looked into it and it does actually work out that the average person makes about, not excatly, a million dollars more in their lifetime if they go to college.
Thank you both for your input. I appreciate it.
The key term needing explication here is 'success.' Making money is only one -- and by far the least interesting or important -- measure of success. When you think about the many other sorts of things we might aim to achieve, and how a college education (as contrasted with a mere degree) might support them, you will have no shortage of premises to support this thesis.
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